Wednesday, 7 December 2016

Dine and Dance 2016 - LJ

Last night , At Dine and Dance It was great .Everyone had a lot of fun and it stayed that way for the night until it got a little silly of course , but that didn't stop us from playing with one another dancing to fast and slow songs . Before I got there Ricky looked like he was waiting miserably until I came and heading down to the hall I managed to meet up with Huriata , Lovey , Paris and Rosemary .    Heading in we were invited to eat and I grabbed what I wanted . TWICE.or 3 times or so... . But anyways more year 7's came into feast into the food and after a few minutes of eating they went onto the dance floor to bond with their other friends who were year 8's because this was their  ' Farewell Dinner '  for the year .

The Dances kept on going until the slow songs came on then everyone chose their dance partner and went ahead and slow danced and the boys chose their partners . The Girls . I considered Marcus and Raena the tallest out of any of the " Couples "  That night but summer itself was approaching and IT WAS HOT! . I could barely bare a second inside the hall because I needed air and fast. I Decided to open the door and let myself breathe in the air before going into the hall again . Then after the hall door was closed and the heat began again  so I had to take a drink and the coldest drink was the orange juice but that of course wasn't enough . So I had to take of my shirt underneath pulling u my sleeves allowing some air to come through although  " Being Hot" it worked.

And During the night the songs were playing over each other and some were skipped making me think " What is happening ? ." . And when the last few songs were playing some of the boys sat down but not the
" Couples " . As time passed I walked around questioning what time it is .Few songs later Dine and Dance ended taking photo's not there but the entire time the songs were playing.

Saturday, 3 December 2016

The Olympic Creed and Motto

Citius, Altius, Fortius - Swifter , Higher , Stronger - Olympic Motto
"The most important thing in the Olympic Games is not to win but to take part, just as the most important thing in life is not the triumph but the struggle. The essential thing is not to have conquered but to have fought well." - Olympic Creed

Wednesday, 30 November 2016

Minigolf Blogpost. - 2016 - LJ

Today , On Tuesday we headed out again for mini golf in the hot sun  . For my partners it was  Me ( LJ ) , Azure , Fine , Eve and M.J . With our teacher Ms Morrison . Everyone else was sectioned off with other adults or teachers  . In minigolf there were two parts to it . So a set of groups had their own course to themselves down below where the moving monkey statue was and further down . But where me and my team were heading was up where the other set of courses were . Some going high and low . We first started on the course where it looked like a ' Key ' Course  . We took turns where all of our shots were rebounding of the concrete edge  on the course because without the concrete walls the shots would be going anywhere . But each course had their own section depending on how big the course but it was small enough for my teammates to fit in and we were told to stay off the green or else we would interrupt the others shots . I was close to interrupting Eve's shot but I dodged it by jumping above the ball , that small , small ball . Don't know why I jumped . I could have just gone wide and let it go through me . Heading onto the next course it was a shot that goes up but comes back down to go for the goal!. We were told  " You want to get the least to win " by our teacher Ms Morrison so I tried but I mostly got more so don't know if I lost or so because getting more would mostly mean you would lose but on some I got the least , Heading on there were many courses but we had to take a break soon enough right ? But we didn't know we had to leave early .With being told to eat and after we eat we have to go on the bus because the bus already arrived before we ate . Finishing our food , we head onto the bus with someone we never knew but heading back home we talked and never sang anything . But On the way back we mistakenly sang twinkle twinkle little star . Heading back we finished or reflections.

Tuesday, 29 November 2016

29.11.16 - LJ

Today On Tuesday , We , Or the camp people started off With Activity 5 . The TEAM shields . Meanwhile I was told to do a thank you card for the teachers who looked after me while Ms Aireen and The Others were gone . I couldn't figure out what to draw on my thank you card for The EOTC teachers so I went random and I never scribbled on it just random decorations on the front blank side .

Using many felts I coloured it with many different Idea's of my own because I never had any Ideas at all in my mind . But I went ahead and finished it . Then Instead of sitting there I made different templates of shields . My best shield was the one with the skull on top . Then after that we did the same thing but we were helping each other finish our shields .

Monday, 28 November 2016

Friday, 25 November 2016

Thursday, 24 November 2016

EOTC #4 and 3 - Heading To The Monterey Theateres and The School fun day.

Today , we had went to the Monterey Theaters in Howick heading there to watch the secret life of pets along with some parent helpers. I was with Ms Shiriwastow with Timote , and Others names I forgot . But anyway we got there In our seats and before we got to watch the new yet old movie Secret Life Of Pets  ( Because it was released quite a while ago ) . 

Even though I had seen this yet again it was quite funny to see how pets react to their owners leaving them in the house for a day . And in the movie letting that happen would make them either play around the house or venturing outside by themselves or with an owner.

I was shifting around from crossing one leg and not doing it . The seats felt too small for me . My favourite part of the movie was when they went through the sausage hallucination because it made me want sausages as well and at the same time I really felt hungry . Minutes and Minutes of watching it got to the sad part . This was because years and years after Duke's Former relationship with his previous owner , the owner had passed away. 

The School Fun day.

Yesterday we got to do rotation activities , The four stations were face painting , Christmas tree making , Making a Huge star or flower with chip bags , and Finger painting . We had to do all four of the activities even if we didn't finish the stuff we were making but I did . In the flower station me and my group ( Perenara , Suave and Me ) , managed to finish our flower before time ran out.

And then after break We had to finish off our stations because I had already finished the face painting , Making the huge flower , Finger painting . Then coming down to the last one christmas tree making . I never really got it at first but me and my friend Perenara sort of mucked up our first attempt so we had to repeat it . Then after a few steps we finally figured out how it made up the ' Christmas Tree ' in paper . It was sort of annoying because the strips still joined in the middle would never stick .Couple of minutes later I finished it and the strips stuck on . Making the Christmas tree . We finished it off putting glue on and spreading glitter making it look great. 

Then we went to the final event of the day the slip and slide . We were so excited we went onto the water slide first A couple of people later it was my turn and I slid hitting the ground and the tarpaulin hard at the same time making me groan as I went to the back of the line but I saw sponges in buckets full of water so me and Perenara went there to throw some water at people except teachers because they were never ready for water . As time went on we threw and chucked water at people countless times until it came to the end with me wetting myself hard with hot water getting my entire body wet and it felt good because I felt like I was gonna dry out before the day ended . Heading back upstairs to the toilets we got changed and sat outside the classes . 

I had felt tired and after all that I was about to walk home until I got picked up my family and headed on home.

Tuesday, 15 November 2016

Celebrating Ourselves - LJ

Today we had learn't why it is very important to embrace our achievements and our own uniqueness ( me )

I am worthy to be celebrated because I found out what and why people like us and I also gain a sense of self value because if you think other people are special why not about yourself?.

My fellow classmates had described me as a person who makes others laugh , a good and nice person , a very active type of person and a weird person which I will probably take as a compliment and finally a trustworthy person also a intelligent person.

It is important to recognise value in yourself because I am special because I am part of a family who had mastered tattoos being passed down generation from generation , artist to artist .Although I can't do that myself ( mastering the art of tattoos ) but I have a different idea of what I might do for the future.

Friday, 11 November 2016

Reflection Of The Two Key Competencies.


1 - Participating and Contributing .
2 - Relating To Others.

Participating and Contributing. -
This morning we were discussing the meanings of Participating and Contributing and Relating to others.
We had a brainstorm talking about the different meanings of the two. Participating and contributing meaning that everyone has to play a part in activities or many other things going on for others it is in camp but I will not be going sadly but I wanted to if I could .

Relating to others - In the next minute or so we were talking about Relating To Others .The  Meanings consist of Talking to a wide range of people  , Being involved actively , working together effectively  , cooperating in learning , Seeking feedback and feedforward  . This involved Room 9 as well . So it was more of a teamwork based activity rather than a single class . Because this was also based on camp as well that was  a reason for both two main senior classes to come together.


Tuesday, 8 November 2016

Where would you live - Timote and LJ

Where would you live

With humans evolving they have learned to live in a technologically world.They were presented  with great choices on where to live . They now have extensive choices  but people today still share the same fundamental and survival needs as their cave-dwelling ancestors with food and water , shelter from the elements and the protection from threats.

In 2011 , Archaeologists had discovered the oldest evidence of a cave used 77,000 years ago.From inside the Sibudu cave in South Africa . The investigations of the ancient beds revealed medicinal leaves , stems and grass in sediment then measuring about three metres of thick.

Caves had provided a natural ,convenient source of shelter . Along with protection from predators . Speleologists people who study caves and their features . Archeologists long have been aware of signs in early life in caves such as the remains of fires.

Early christians and other refugees who lived in what is now a region of Cappadocia had created entire cities over 3,500 years ago. To keep themselves safe from a prosecution and the underground city of Derinkuyu , was home to about 3,000 people and it had a few entrances that had easily could been blocked off. And it was of course defended.

The City had about 5 separate floors of caves and was inhabited to the depth of 60 metres. Caves had formed on the hillsides of Cappadocia .They had provided shelter for communities until the early part of the 20th century. Cave entrances can be visible or hidden . The historically Significant Skocjan caves   in Slovenia had some entrances .

Monday, 31 October 2016

The Titanic Locker Key Sold For 144,000 Dollars - LJ

World's First Invisible Helmet . - LJ

Four Dead At Dreamworld - LJ

Connections with celebrations - LJ

WALT Identify what celebrations can mean to me .
This is about my personal connections with celebrations.

Halloween Invitation 2016 - Orlando and LJ

Our Diwali Presentation - Abigail and LJ.

We are learning about Diwali.

Me and My buddy also made a diva light.

Tuesday, 11 October 2016

Disconnected - My Draft Narrative.

Every Picture tells a story.

Use your imagination and experience to narrate (tell) a story about the photo.
Where is it? Who is there?
What problem is caused?  How is it solved?

Think about:
  • where your story is set
  • who your characters are - what they do, what they say, and how they think and feel
  • the problem and how it is solved
  • the order of your ideas and how they are linked

Remember to:
  • choose your words carefully
  • take care with your spelling, punctuation, and sentences
  • edit - add or delete words or sentences to improve your work.



Disconnected :
P1 : Luke and Orion plead their parents to let them play in the forest , they say yes after getting sick and tired of hearing please . Heading to the forest they say that they should invite Bayley to come have fun with them . Happily walking down the path went darker and darker they run into the forest hoping to find a small touch of light .

But as the darkest night nothing happened . Luke remembered that legend tells of stalkers that come alive at night in the forest. They were all together but out of nowhere Bayley just vanishes . With Luke frightened to a standstill , Orion had to leave him in order to find Bayley  .  Rushing and Jumping he had wasted no mere second or minute to find Bayley until *wpish* . He uses his own body to stop going further and just manages to come to a stop barely hitting a tree stump.

He stands up trying to siphon out which path bayley was taken or possibly ran into . Being unaware of what would lie out for him he continues to search flipping out his flashlight . He yells and yells until he finds something weird which would Bayley would know about . “ She’s here ” he says to himself . He regains his pace using his athleticism to jump and run all over the place until he finds everything that she had on the path  . “Darnit Bayley ! what are you doing you know there’s stalkers here ” Orion says but meanwhile Bayley finds this forest okay until came to the presence of something never before seen . The Darkhound - King of the Dark Night Forest  .

Bayley asks a whole lot of questions , Saying the last one she had been interrupted by Darkhound saying  “ SILENCE ! IN WHAT OF YOUR KIND’S PRESENCE DO YOU HAVE THE RIGHT TO STAND BEFORE MINE ” . “ I -  “ NO ”! YOU LEAVE NOW AND TAKE YOUR LIFE WITH YOU . “ I’LL NEVER LEAVE  , not until you tell me what you want ” .  Orion listens to the talk as Darkhound prepares to eliminate her - For GOOD! As if a dog Finally got to destroy a cat. Preparing to destroy her Bayley stands in fright but in a mere second Orion just catches her “ WAIT - !!BOOM!! . “ Hm. Pathetic ” .  Ahem , hey  Mr .Cornhead  you sure about that , I think you missed something . Later - * Hut *

Jumping side to side Darkhound merely misses his shot . Then sooner the light shines as it comes to day . With all their parents worried they begin to make calls to them but there’s obviously no reception in the forest so they wouldn’t pick up the calls and Luke comes back to life Telling him to run and they just make it out having to jump for it and somehow Bayley is happier than ever meanwhile Orion collapses staying flat lying on the side of face . “ He’s Out - Cold ” Luke tells her .
“ It took all he had just to get me , I’m sorry Orion ”. He manages to store one more breath for him to wake up  saying  “ Your welcome ” .
Bayley and Luke Drop off Orion  to his parents . “ What happened , Why you little -” . “ Maria  wait - Bayley why are you crying - “ It’s It’s because he saved me from the dark forest ” . “ So my boy risked his own life in order to save you from the dark forest ” . “ Yes sir ”. “ What do you know he actually is learning from us ” . But anyway we’ll rest him on the couch until he wakes up ” Tony says. As Bayley and Luke  depart from the house they pray each other goodnight and a happy day. But Darkhounds fate is yet to be known ...

Monday, 10 October 2016

Explaning My Holiday - LJ

Image result for birthday cake.Image result for RainImage result for Friends House

The Sky rains as if it were trying to cry it was rushing rain for the whole time , I could smell chicken nuggets don’t know whether they were fried, Going to Otara was not one easy drive , I played at my friends house  and one of them was SO DRY.

Speeding cars were  beeping their  horns many times . I Celebrated my two cousins birthday and the Raro was not right . We left at the end it was so great because i finished off the birthday with  slice of cake and ice cream by the side.

I went many places every day , I grew tired of walking , it was so pointless all we did was walking and talking , On saturday I realized school was two days away so I had enjoyed both days ,and I didn’t really wanna come but today yet again it is very fun .

( I am  talking about my cousin’s birthday , going to my friends house ,Going to Otara , and walking to places with my mum.) in one story. A MIXED STORY  

Thursday, 22 September 2016

Maths in Another Group

What i learnt today for math.
I learnt that the main number in the question is the numerator and the left over of the question is the denominator

There is 5 chocolate bars and 3 children.
I cut the 5 chocolate bars into 3 thirds
Each child gets 1 whole chocolate bar
there is 2 chocolate bars lift so i shared
them between the 3 children. 
The Fraction for this question is 1 whole and 2/3's
The Division for this question is 5 divide by 3 =  1 whole and 3 fifths
and the Multiplication is 5 x 3 = 15.

Monday, 19 September 2016

Capital Corrections - LJ

Last october, my family and I visited the Albuquerque International balloon fiesta. It was very exciting seeing the balloons fly through the new Mexico sky every day. The fiesta began on a saturday morning and lasted for two weeks. The Autumn air was crisp each morning as balloons shaped like Darth Vader, Clocks, and Sleeping Beauty sailed by. My dad worked at the fiesta helping matt park campers in the lot. People would come from as far as Canada to see these great balloons. The best part about the whole trip was that my whole family got a ride in a hot air balloon. Tim was our pilot and he flew us over albuquerque 600 feet in the air. We could see places like McDonald's and Hobby Lobby! we plan to head back to new Mexico next october. Maybe we will see you there!

Friday, 16 September 2016

Chinese Simple Greetings and Phrases and Numbers - LJ

Hello - Ni Hao

Are you good - Ni Hao Ma?

I’m very good - Wo hen hao

And you ? - Ni Ne

Thank you  - xie xie

Your Welcome - Bu Ke Q+ i

Goodbye - Zai jian

Use these to help learn a little chinese cause you might go to china and you might not know anything at all but these simple greetings and phrasings will help you learn.

Image result for chinese numbers 1 to 10

Numbers in chinese.
Get someone who's chinese to help you learn this !!! .

Chinese Language Facts - LJ

Thursday, 15 September 2016

What Things Can Hurt Friendship ? - LJ

What Things Can Hurt Friendship?

Mean Humour - 

So Teasing is like tickling . It can make you laugh but make sure not to do it too much or too long because the person might hate it . A Victim will find it funny but inside they’re insulted and they wouldn’t and don’t like it.

Backstabbing -

If you had a friend dumb and annoying , would you stick it into your friend and kill them ? NO of course not , but talking secretly about them will hurt them just as much and you’ll be surprised and it’ll be amazing  about how they found out about you backstabbing.

Too Much Time -

Everyone all needs space and time apart even some good friends might get sick of each other if they hang out way too much make sure you have to give friendships space.

Showing off -

It is always okay to be confident and show how proud we are to be ourselves . Tricks , Jokes and Stories can make a friendship fun but slow it down going too high with it people can think that you are trying to prove you are better than they are . So ask yourself
 Is this thing i am doing making my friends feel good or bad?

The One That Starts It All - Bullying 

Yes bullying is a friendship warning . Do you people have to put this of course yes because this is what starts it bullying. Some people get bullied by their own self-called “ Friend” or “Friends”. If you have a friend that you boss around and tease you may not have thought of it as bullying but watch out and be careful

My Narrative Writing Using TIDES - LJ

Narrative Writing Framework
I am learning to create a narrative based on an image.


Give your story a captivating title!
Nature's Darkness
Characters - describe your characters in detail.

What is happening? What is the situation?
What is happening to your characters?
What are they doing?
What are they saying?
When is your story set?
Describe the setting of your story

California , Los Angeles -
Many have chosen never to go to the forest at night for there awaits deadly beasts in their path through and out of it  many have dared but had never come back  with family and friends fearing that they were dead by the one strike of an animal or something even worse the nature queen herself  Mother nature .

When darkness rises the light falls and mother nature is consumed by darkness herself   and nature but two people never fears  anything - Loyz and Dynex.
Loyz would always be the happy one all the time and Dynex would be the serious one.  Both were never really afraid of anything at scary situations like this . His face is so serious that he barely smiles everywhere  even at the most funny things everyone always seen .
(They’re basically opposites of each other) Sad and Happy .
What is the cause of the problem?
What are the characters doing? Have you describe their feelings?
Include language features to support key ideas.
  • Simile
  • Metaphors
  • Onomatopoeia
  • Personification
Include some engaging  dialogue in your story. “ “
Light shun only through the day to free mother nature from her darkness but only at a short time coming . When it hit the night Loyz and Dynex knew what to do when it hit the final night of winter the 31st of august . As the final night struck they knew they had to do something to free the Mother nature herself crack the gem to let the dark spirits out and if they do that it’ll be a regular summer night for mother nature .

Let alone the nature queen was planning to take over every forest spreading darkness to beautiful forests and flowers .Taking special gear they set out to hunt the Dark Nature Queen herself walking past the dead bodies of those who never made it they kept on going regardless the consequences of walking into the forest at a bad time.
Then out of nowhere a wolf comes out of the shadows and tried to eat Dynex but with extreme speed and stealth Dynex killed the Wolf in a flash and they kept on  going . Obstacle after  obstacle after obstacle and they finally made it with blood spilled everywhere on them and on the floor but finally making it they knew this wasn’t gonna be easy because they’re messing with the dark nature queen herself  as thunder struck the ground This marked the final battle and the last night of  the Dark Nature Queen - Mother Nature ! or will she continue her reign with darkness queen herself ! .
Expand - Entertain  your readers some more!
    • What more does your readers need to know about the problem?
    • Add more interesting dialogue
    • Describe the characters actions and feelings in detail
Include language features to support key ideas.
  • Simile
  • Metaphors
  • Onomatopoeia
  • Personification
Thunder strikes , rainfall , hailstorm , nature brings the worst to them all . Using the special katana empowered with the light of day golden and white switching colors . They both had one each .
Using the power of light  they both made one clash energy of darkness and light hit each other blowing each other away neither were gonna stop weather darkness would win over the forests or mother nature finally sees the light of day .

Giving everything they had The Darkness Nature Queen never cared and made one plan but it would be destructive . And as soon as the final energy wave hit it tried to blow them away but the power was absorbed and made mother nature evolve .
They gave it their all but they realized that this soon was not enough they had to use darkness and light together .
How was the problem solved?
What happened to the characters?
Describe the setting
What is the moral of the story?
With light and darkness combined they yelled harder and harder until *Crack* *ROARRR* The dark spirits say as they were exposed out freeing mother nature from the night and with a blast of power she  relieved herself off of darkness forever . With the battle won both Loyz and Dynex fell to the ground with mother nature using her healing powers to bring them back to life.

Gazing at mother nature she knew where she was supposed to be in the forests and the skies.Both farewelling her they came back out with their faces shining bright and bodies left with the scars of darkness.

Monday, 12 September 2016

U.S.A - Land Of the Brazen , Home Of Duality . LJ

WALT Summarise An Article #2

U.S.A - Land Of the Brazen , Home Of Duality

A half black man refused to stand to U.S.A's national anthem because he knew how badly his people were treated along with that a white person told him to not even dare to disrespect the anthem itself. He also never cared of the 400 years of injustice the black people went through .

About 50,00 people have to serve non- parole sentences to over 3000 people who had committed crime as a child are locked up FOREVER . Possibly until they die. Tens of thousands who are in prison face incredibly long periods in prison who committed no crime of violence as a child.

That is why the presidential race is down to Hillary Clinton and Donald Trump basicly an egomaniac and a denialist Trump is more of an egomaniac . Don't get him wrong he is not trying to knock down America's perse . He is just trying to figure out why Hillary Clinton and Donald are the last two in the presidential contest.
In trying to understand how their "Justice" system works , in so to perhaps gain a broader who understands the nation the only conclusion is that America's also have a vengeful side to their cheerful christian image had meant to be forgiving.

Tuesday, 6 September 2016

Author's Purpose - LJ

This Article is about how watching  too much T.V can affect health.
Who is in this book  ? - The Girl , Heather And Their Parents.
What is happening in this article ? - Both girls are spending too much time on T.V .
When did this happen ? Everyday  for both girls
Where did this happen?
Why were the girls stopped from watching T.V ?
They spend too much time on it and never get to know what's going on outside instead of inside because on the inside it's all technology and video games. But on the outside it's all Chess games  , Netball practice and other sports.
How did this happen ?
They spent too much time on T.V.

Everywhere this girl turns people are telling her to stop watching T.V , she spends too much time on her computer and play too many video games . But she likes it ,always getting lost in the story lines absorbed in others lives  and escaping her own boring one .
She is told to read a book every 30 minutes and the book was Narnia : The Lion , The Witch  And the wardrobe . Her mum found the book's storyline real entertaining and absorbing . If she read it the mum said she would find the storylines more entertaining than the actual movie. But she only liked the movie more than the book but if she read the book the movie would sound boring to her.

She played chess with her grandad and she would hate it . The grandad said that she would find this better than any video game . But because she loved watching and playing on her T.V and Computer she denied the advice given by her grandad thinking that he is just old and boring and would never want to play chess. Her best friend Heather never got away with it too because her mum and dad are making her play a sport - Netball because she also spends too much time on T.V meaning heather giving up her computer chats because she has netball practice. But the good thing is they get to talk face to face.

Her mum reckons she should join netball practice.
and stop using T.V
The girl finally realizes that she should spend only little time on T.V and lots of time bonding with family playing chess and reading books..

Friday, 2 September 2016

The 6 Tips Of Friendships

                            1 - Be Friendly
 In order to be friendly you have to be respectful and in order to be respectful you have  nice to other people .
Some people are  shy to make friends , which is okay  and sometimes  you might be thinking that they won’t be friendly to you . If you are shy that is one reason why you must like try to  just talk to someone but you might lack confidence and run away when they haven’t got the chance to talk to you.

           2 - Remember Names
      Politicians and successful business people have to train so hard to remember the name of people . When the politicians and the business people get someone's name right the person who owns that name will appreciate that . When you forget someone's name the person who owns that name will think that they’re not really important because everyone would like to be remembered .

3- Learn to Listen
Talking to people can be friendly but listening could be even friendlier . If they knew you were listening ask them questions such as “  So what happened Then ” ? 
 or “ How’d that make you feel ?  you can also encourage them by saying “ Hmmm Yeah ” ETC . You have two ears and one mouth that should be a hint to listen twice as much as you talk.

4 - Be Positive

Positive people sometimes expect good things to happen. They’ll see the good in people and forget about all their faults. People encourage each other and give compliments to them . This lets people have more fun more than others who criticize and grizzle.

5 - Remember Special Times

Remembering special times would show that you
  care . Such as remembering a friend’s birthday or having an important sports game . A friend might have been sick last week and they feel better ask how they are feeling now. If you can remember a fun time you people had , then remind them about it . That would sure cheer them up.

6 - Be Yourself

Actual and true friends will like you for who you are . It’s always worth finding friends you can be yourself with and not friends that make you wanna be someone else.

Thursday, 1 September 2016

Persuasive Writing Framework #2 - LJ

Persuasive Writing Framework

Persuasive Writing Topic and Task
It is wrong to fight
What do you think? Do you agree or disagree? Are there ideas to support both sides of this topic?
Write to persuade your reader of your ideas.
Think about:
what your reader needs to know about the topic
how you are going to introduce the topic the order of your ideas and how you link them what to include in your summary.

Planning for persuasive writing
Example of persuasive writing
Persuasive writing phrases and sentence starters


It is wrong to fight

Introduce the topic by stating your opinion
It is wrong to fight because some fights aren’t even for one single reason  such as drinking.


Reason #1
1- State your first reason
2 - Support your reason with an example

My most important reason is because some fights occur even when they’re not supposed to because some can happen on late nights and some can happen because of gang wars or something like that ..

I think that because
Some fights on T.V are like U.F.C but they’re a payed respective company so they’re paid to fight . But fights like these have no reason at all . Some of these fights are of late night outs some fights are so severe, It leaves them with blood all over their own body , even broken body parts .

For example,
There was this one guy who one punch killed  another person he didn’t even know and  after the family had just  found out a few days later ,the family was filled with deep sadness and anger  , Also the person killed was a loner but he didn’t care he would always travel .He even made his own 2 surfboards called the “Voyager” . The killer was sentenced to 22 months in jail , But the family feared this wasn’t enough  they either wanted life or at least 8 years in prison. They also feared that he might return and hunt down people  because of this sentence.

Reason #2
1- State your second reason
2 - Support your reason with an example

My Second reason is because there are different types of fights ,
For Example. Mocking Family members/friends,
 No reason at all ,  and  play fighting turns real .
Most fights are caused because when people are way too drunk , they’ll fight someone that they don’t know for no random reason. These aren’t even reasons to fight . Fights are real out of control actually no way near control  once it gets way too far. Fights can accel real quickly and you might involve your family in it and you know what’s weird ?  some people say it .
For example :
 When you involve your family and you say you’ll bring your family and then....
 The next day nothing even happens ! and they don’t even come because they have work ! or the next day or the next .  And after that you might forget that you even wanted to involve your family . But then you wouldn’t really care would you ? . You’d just do it yourself and take “ Care “ of it yourself .

Reason #3
1- State your third reason
2 - Support your reason with an example
My third reason is because fighting can be used for defense if you are in very big trouble in the streets that’s why some people have to learn techniques in school programs or such places like a gym or a boxing training centre  to learn how to defend yourself in a fight when you’ve found yourself cornered  in the street . In the street no one uses fair tactics really , . So you have to stand up for yourself using fighting skills but if you don’t have any skills  well ... you get an alternative ending to death .

Summarise your argument by restating your opinion

My Opinion is that fighting is a fair tactic in life , but it can be used in bad ways although i’ve might have repeated this it needs to be permanent out there to everyone in the world  in families , streets , neighbourhoods  even nightclubs and pubs.

What do I think about this piece of persuasive writing?
I think that it is pretty good and it has a reason on why fighting can be used for good and not for bad . It can be used for defence when you're caught in something you shouldn’t be in somewhere real bad.